Essay Sample
The pople living in the modern countries and societies are getting busier day by day . what are some of the advantages or disadvantages of this?

Busyness is A Modern Health Crisis. How do we measure professional success? Is it by the location of our office or the size of our paycheck? Is it measured by the dimensions of our home or the speed of our car?Some ten years ago, those would have been the most prominent items ; today, however, when someone really wants to show you how important they are, they’ll tell you all about their busy day. We have created a society of “busyness,” both in the workplace and in the home. Although this is a globalized problem, from my point of view, America is the icon of busyness and this is NOT good. (Thesis)
For one , relaxation time helps people manage their daily stress, acquire new perspectives on ideas, and find new energy.( Rule of 3) Denmark , for instance, is consistently rated the happiest country in the world by the UN and myriads of researchers, who make the study of “happiness” and “well-being” their priority. Not only is Denmark deemed the happiest country due to its trust in their government, a minimum wage of $20, and an average of 33 hour work weeks, but also to all that Danes use their extra time to involve themselves in extracurricular activities. When the OECD ranked nations based on work-life balance last year, Denmark came out on top.
Further, Americans are literally working themselves to death. Forced overtime, over scheduling, commuting, unpaid labor, housework, increased standards of cleanliness, time cost, and media usage occupy so much of our day that no time is left for ourselves, and we glorify this. We work all day and fill our free time with additional activities because we’re “important” and no one else can do what we do.
This culture of busyness is also creating an extremely unhealthy nation, both mentally and physically. CNN reports that health care costs grew at an average rate of 5.8 percent every year until Nearly $1 in every $5 spent in the United States in 2024 on health care, and for a country where 1 out of 5 dollars is spent on healthcare, America is extremely unhealthy.
On top of all that, we are experiencing a significant decline in social activities. We are not visiting with our friends and our neighbors like the happy Danes do and we aren’t volunteering nearly as much as our citizens have historically. We are even seeing steady decrease in the amount of voters and the amount of people who recycle.
To conclude, Do you work hard so you can retire and sit on the beach with your kids and lounge without a care in the world? Well you can do that now! Use your vacation days! Take time to relax and de-stress. Clear your mind and your thoughts and give the world your best! Once you are happy, well-rested, and relaxed your productivity will greatly increase, you will build more meaningful relationships with others, and you will find that the “good life” has been within your reach all along.
| Credit | Description | Bandscore |
|---|---|---|
| LR | The vocabulary is varied and appropriate for an academic context. The writer uses terms related to education and technology effectively, demonstrating a good command of language. This would likely receive a high score. | 7 |
| C C | The text is logically organized, with a clear progression of ideas. It uses appropriate linking words and phrases to connect thoughts, making it easy to follow. This aspect would also score favorably. | 7 |
| GR | The Special utilization of : "not only" , "but also" was very technical . | 7 |
| TA | The text effectively addresses the topic of technology use in the classroom and provides relevant examples and arguments. It presents a clear message about the importance of minimizing distractions for better learning outcomes. This would likely score well. | 7 |
| 7 | ||
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